Mmph.

I loved the feel of this - from the moment Rodney caught on to John's anxiety in the food court, and through to the hotel - it was all so vivid and in character. Some of your writing whips in with a delicious almost sting - I loved the lines about "the iphone was for shouting.." and when John is tied up at Rodney's feet, and Rodney's cheerful announcement that he's going to shower and then beat John absolutely sent me out of my own head for a minute.

Lovely, lovely writing.